Wow! Your EPK/website looks great! A few minor suggestions:
The blue font at the bottom of this page is hard to read--you might make the background image more transparent or add a semi-transparent layer behind the blue text: http://charleshsutter.wix.com/blivits#!about/c2414
Also, I noticed a few spelling/punctuation errors here and there--if you want we can PM about that some time.
Looks good, Charles. The facts are well-organized, and you did a great job of breaking it up into what we in the newspaper world called "chunks" - easy-to-digest breakout boxes.
As Daisy said, there are some typos, and in your bio you're inconsistent in your use of Mr. Sutter and Charles (I'd probably just go with Sutter, personally). I think the USS Randolph facts box could use some context for some of the items, too - how long was the average ship of that era in service? Was 3 battle stars typical for most ships, and what were they typically awarded for? Just an extra line or two for each item could probably do a good job explaining the relevance.
Charles,
ReplyDeleteWow! Your EPK/website looks great! A few minor suggestions:
The blue font at the bottom of this page is hard to read--you might make the background image more transparent or add a semi-transparent layer behind the blue text: http://charleshsutter.wix.com/blivits#!about/c2414
Also, I noticed a few spelling/punctuation errors here and there--if you want we can PM about that some time.
Overall, great work!
Looks good, Charles. The facts are well-organized, and you did a great job of breaking it up into what we in the newspaper world called "chunks" - easy-to-digest breakout boxes.
ReplyDeleteAs Daisy said, there are some typos, and in your bio you're inconsistent in your use of Mr. Sutter and Charles (I'd probably just go with Sutter, personally). I think the USS Randolph facts box could use some context for some of the items, too - how long was the average ship of that era in service? Was 3 battle stars typical for most ships, and what were they typically awarded for? Just an extra line or two for each item could probably do a good job explaining the relevance.